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Nineteen

quietly reusing words
her mother crooned
when in the womb
she sits and whirls.
how thin her wrists
how delicate the skin
that peels over her heartbeat
blipping gently now as it did
last birthday, the one before, the day before
beneath thumb’s questing pressure

she is a daughter to her father,
she is inquisitive and at times
a doofus, yes,
but she is kind,
and this is all true.

her hair is a damp blaze
curling about pale shoulders
and dark mooncircles
beneath earthdirt vision.

she sways thinly
but she is no willow
whip, twisting at every calling
no. her great grandfather would have been proud
of solid hips. she is neutral on the matter.

dancing alone, conducting
wind, caressing bark with bare
feet, this is her freedom.

she upturns elbows
to face the storm.
©2007-2008 ~sylvanheart
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This was written in April 2007, on my nineteenth birthday. The subject is obviously myself.


This was featured by :iconblueskye27:! :hug: Thank you so much!
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*Blueskye27:iconBlueskye27: Nov 5, 2007, 6:14:37 PM
I like it. Interesting - "willow whip" as a play on will 'o wisp. I think my favorite line is the "damp blaze around the shoulders" - beautiful imagery. :)
~sylvanheart:iconsylvanheart: Nov 5, 2007, 6:43:37 PM Mood: Cheerful
Thank you! The "will 'o wisp" play is actually entirely unintentional--I had to look it up to remind myself of what that actually is, but now that I know, I could smile and nod and say that, "yes, that works in the poem nicely, doesn't it?" ;) haha I really was thinking of the long, vinelike whips that are a willow's branches, and how the slightest change in the wind stirs them. I guess a bobbing light lying to travelers, as something which I am NOT, works as well, because I am a lover of honesty.
This poem was my written version of a self-portrait. =D
*Blueskye27:iconBlueskye27: Nov 5, 2007, 6:48:39 PM
There's also a plant called a willow 'o wisp (at least that's we call them around here - maybe it's a regional thing) - a type of reed - that's what I thought you meant.

It's a very nice self-portrait. :clap:

I may have to try that sometime.
~sylvanheart:iconsylvanheart: Nov 5, 2007, 7:04:54 PM
Ah. I didn't know about that sort of reed, so I suppose you're right that it's regional. That, or I'm ignorant about it. Either way. :grin:

Thank you again! It was a fun thing to do, especially on a birthday. I think that it's the only poem where I really tried to incorporate my parents into the idea of the shaping of myself.
=syersHasFEETS:iconsyersHasFEETS: Nov 26, 2007, 9:52:35 PM
Hey, I wanted to see some of your other deviations! I really, really like this. Freeform poetry is amazing.

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If I had a nickle for every time I blinked, I'd be living on my own island by now.
~sylvanheart:iconsylvanheart: Nov 26, 2007, 10:41:32 PM Mood: Cheerful
Thank you so much! I'm glad you came back, hehe. I don't know why you did, but it makes me feel special and maybe like I've got some things good here. Yay! :sing:

I love freestyle poetry. It's usually the only kind I write.

I'm glad that you like this poem. Since it's an especially personal one, I doubly appreciate the comment. =D
=syersHasFEETS:iconsyersHasFEETS: Nov 26, 2007, 10:43:59 PM
I love your gallery ^.^

I hear that, I have extreme trouble being pleased with my work if it rhymes. Most poetic thoughts don't have structure, ne?

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If I had a nickle for every time I blinked, I'd be living on my own island by now.
~sylvanheart:iconsylvanheart: Nov 26, 2007, 10:49:57 PM
awwh Thank you bunches! :hug:

Yes. Most poetic thoughts aren't even coherent, but words pop up to attempt to describe the thoughts. It's an interesting process. Making order out of chaos? But not TOO orderly. Then it'd be boring.
*rambles on*
=syersHasFEETS:iconsyersHasFEETS: Nov 26, 2007, 10:51:47 PM
You're welcome ^_^

Yeah, that's the fun of it though :) I wrote a poem in class the other day that made absolutely no sense whatsoever. . .it reflected the confusion going on in my head in a humorous sort of way ^.^

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If I had a nickle for every time I blinked, I'd be living on my own island by now.
=syersHasFEETS:iconsyersHasFEETS: Nov 26, 2007, 10:52:40 PM
Haikus are great, too. I made a habit of writing funny ones though. Now it's hard to write pretty, natural Haikus without mentioning my friend, Kaleb o_O

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If I had a nickle for every time I blinked, I'd be living on my own island by now.